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Recent years, the number of crime committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. discuss this issues. give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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Cutting-edge, have promoted a huge amount of advanced technological devices in need for working, studying and entertaining.
This
 tendency tends to be numerous crimes committed by youngsters when they use the devices uncontrollably.
This
 essay will outline some
reasons
 for a
lack
 of
education
 and parental guidance, and provide some solutions to address them.
Firstly
, one of the major
reasons
 is the
lack
 of
education
.
For instance
, in my city, some surveys indicated that there has been an increasing trend in a large number of younger hackers who attacked or stole someone's account to jump into prison in recent years. Surprisingly,
this
 resulted in a
lack
 of cyber integrity information, younger hackers would only like to earn quick money in need
such
 as purchasing luxury items.
Secondly
, most parents prefer to make money affordable for their daily basic needs rather than accompanying their children or adolescents.
Consequently
, children or adolescents are more likely to be easier to commit a
crime
 without parental guidance. Even though some
reasons
 are serious, some measures can be taken.
To begin
 with, it is obvious tackling a
lack
 of
education
 issue is for the public authorities should supply various campaigns about
crime
 authenticity for the locals owing to the engagement of youths acknowledge it. Another suggestion is for educational communities to hold some talks about moral integrity to the enhancement of students' mindset to not take action on wrongdoings. Doing these tends to alleviate the rate of
crime
 committed by youths. In conclusion, based on the statements above, some
reasons
 for a
lack
 of
education
 and parenting guidance.
However
, promoting various campaigns about
crime
 authenticity for the locals, and holding some talks about moral integrity at schools, is more likely to alleviate the rate of
crime
 committed by youngsters.
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