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some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In spite of living in the countryside, youngsters prefer to live in towns and
cities
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, whereas, only elder
people
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 stay in outskirt areas. I personally believe it is negative side due to the following reasons that can discuss in forthcoming paragraphs.
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, the main reason is that the towns and
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 become congested due to the high volume of the public.
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, society may face lots of problems like traffic, the high price of housing and so on.
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, in Toronto city, the roads are always busy with traffic,
people
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 meet with accidents every day. Even traffic police are unable to control that accident.
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, the crime rate can enhance in these towns because all family are live without their elders and when they are on their jobs, robbers easily commit crimes.
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,
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 cut themselves with nature,
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 look like a concrete jungle everywhere seeing big buildings, even
people
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 forget about the beauty of nature.
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, the public gets so many diseases like depression and migraines.
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, city life runs at a high pace,
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 always work under pressure,
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 year, 20% of
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 committed suicide due to tensions and worries.
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,
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 even don't know about their neighbours, they forget their social life that leads to feelings of loneliness. In conclusion,
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 developed societies and
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 give
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 too many facilities,
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 is not a good idea to ruin your life for some materialistic things. So,
people
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 should enjoy nature to living in outskirt areas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • economic opportunities
  • urban areas
  • rural industries
  • cultural heritage
  • overpopulation
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
  • neglect
  • workforce
  • traditional cultures
  • customs
  • pollution
  • support systems
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