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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The huge consumption of sugary products has a negative impact on human beings' health nowadays. While it is suggested to raise the price of those products which contain
sugar
, I completely disagree with
this
 method and think it will not be effective.
Firstly
, expensive sugary
food
 will send a wrong message to the public that
sugar
 is valuable,
instead
 of the idea that
sugar
 is unhealthy. Because of that, the public will still lack awareness of the damage it could cause to our bodies.
For example
, consumers might be keen to buy sweets or sugary drinks as possible as they could afford when
sugar
 plays a role
of
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 luxurious
food
 based on the wrong impression from the market. In
this
 way, it will agains the initial willing which is to lead a healthier consumption habit of the public.
Secondly
, as the main ingredient of various
food
 and drinks,
sugar
 is easy to be produced. By setting the price of
sugar
 overly high, it is actually against the market rule, which will lead to chaos.
Thus
, sugary products will be even more appealing to those consumers who are lack self-discipline and it could make their lives even tougher to some degree. In
this
 way, those people who are targeted to quit sugary drinks, are more likely to be addicted to
sugar
 and even being poorer and poorer. In conclusion, I argue against the idea that we should make sugary
food
 more expensive as a solution to lessen the consumption of
sugar
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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