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Today more people are travelling than ever before. 
Why is this the case? 
What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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Undoubtedly, holidaymaker is now more common than ever before.
People
 are willing to travel around during their free time. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate the underlying reasons and
benefits
 of travelling. The primary reason is the fact that
people
 become more affluent than before. The disposable income has been increasing for decades. It
also
 caused
people
 to change their way of life.
As a result
, travelling has become one form of entertainment.
People
 have started travelling during their holidays. Many bloggers share their tour experiences on the SNS
such
 as “one day tour in New Taipei City” or “A week in Osaka”.
Furthermore
, as globalising business soars, many
people
 are travelling to other countries for business.
For example
 during June every year in Taiwan, there is a computer exhibition for around a 7 day period. During
this
 week there are many foreigners you can see in Taipei. Through
travelling
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,travelling
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 there are several
benefits
.
First
 of all,
people
 can be far away from cities, and release pressure when they soak up a relaxed atmosphere in the countryside. It is possible to reduce mental health problems.
Moreover
, travelling gives
people
 a chance to broaden their views. If travelling in other countries,
people
 will be able to experience different cultures and increase their knowledge.
Then
people
 will not be a frog in the well. In the other words, travelling
benefits
people
 to improve cultural literacy. Overall, travelling will be fun and get some
benefits
 if
people
 make a good plan for tours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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