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Today more people are travelling than ever before. 
Why is this the case? 
What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

#people #case #traveller
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Undoubtedly, holidaymaker is now more common than ever before.
People
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 are willing to travel around during their free time. In
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 of travelling. The primary reason is the fact that
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 become more affluent than before. The disposable income has been increasing for decades. It
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 caused
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 to change their way of life.
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, travelling has become one form of entertainment.
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 have started travelling during their holidays. Many bloggers share their tour experiences on the SNS
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 as “one day tour in New Taipei City” or “A week in Osaka”.
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, as globalising business soars, many
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 are travelling to other countries for business.
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 during June every year in Taiwan, there is a computer exhibition for around a 7 day period. During
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 week there are many foreigners you can see in Taipei. Through
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 there are several
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 of all,
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 can be far away from cities, and release pressure when they soak up a relaxed atmosphere in the countryside. It is possible to reduce mental health problems.
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, travelling gives
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 a chance to broaden their views. If travelling in other countries,
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 will be able to experience different cultures and increase their knowledge.
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 will not be a frog in the well. In the other words, travelling
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 to improve cultural literacy. Overall, travelling will be fun and get some
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 if
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 make a good plan for tours.
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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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