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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can the governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over the fact that the environment is taking a heavy toll on
by
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human’s
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 activities.
This
 essay is devoted to the underlying roots, followed by some equivalently far-reaching remedies to
this
 pressing problem. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are a wealth of means for
people
 to destroy habitat, especially through
air
pollution
. Nowadays,
due to
 an ever-growing demand for travel,
people
 widely
use
 fuel-powered
vehicles
, which leads to the rocketing rate of car ownership. So that the amount of carbon dioxide emitted from these automobiles has increased alarmingly
as a result
 it causes serious environmental
pollution
.
For instance
, most Vietnamese
people
use
 personal
vehicles
 when they participate in traffic,
such
 as motorbikes,
cars
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.
Therefore
,
the
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fossil fuel combustion of transport is one of the tactics ways for humans to make
air
pollution
.
While
 the damaging way to pollute
air
 quality is widely acknowledged (xem lại diễn đạt nhé), the state and individual
people
individuals
 should join hands to resolve the severe problem. In terms of the authorities, the state can introduce green tax and tax incentives to encourage
people
 to
use
 environmentally- friendly
vehicles
.
For example
, Vietnam will reduce taxes when
people
 buy or
use
 hybrid
vehicles
, namely Vinfast electric cars. With regard to
individuals
people
,
people
 should lower the frequency of using ownership
instead
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and
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using more eco-friendly bus systems which are powered by renewable energy.
For instance
, Vietnamese
people
use
renewabley
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renewable
renewably
renewables
 powered
vehicles
 on a regular basis, namely Vinbus, and Cat Linh-Ha Dong high-sky train station.
Hence
, it is necessary for
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both the authorities and
individuals
people
 to cope with
this
 urgent problem together. In conclusion,
air
pollution
 is one of the alarming matters brought about by
humans’
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 activities which brings undesirable impacts on the environment. So, it is vital for
the
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governors and
individuals
people
 to find far-reaching solutions in order to reduce the amount
of
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carbon footprint.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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