Parents should be held legally responsible for their children’s acts. What is your opinion? Support it with personal examples.

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way to bring up a good person. Some believe that

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independence in their education. To support the

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point of kids behaviour should be controlled by their

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person other and father need to pay attention

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bring up in a metro city as a cruel and cold blood personality due to less attention paid by their busy

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on his nature.

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, there should be some relaxation given to the students in their studies so that they can take their own decision.

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will help in their future when they face actual life problems and would be able to solve themselves.

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them to grow in a positive way.

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to pursue the

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, to reiterate above points

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should control the behaviour of their kids by devoting some time towards them and give freedom in their studies to generate a nice and educated person.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

301 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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