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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines will replace many of the tasks we do at home and work now. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problem it will cause.

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There is no doubt that robots and other kinds of powerful
machines
 will accompany humans even more in the future.
As a result
,
people
 will enjoy more time off . To my mind,
this
 evolution has its pros and cons which I analyze in
this
 essay. Using
machines
 will bring countless merits for
people
. One of the main benefits is
people
 can save time. Especially, it will be showing shown more and more benefits for women , as if mostly
work
 at
home
 have been completed by them.they can more hours with their family . Not only for females but
also
 beneficial for males who live apart from family.
For instance
, some
people
 live alone as well as do
work
 or study and they do not have enough
hour
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 at
home
 to complete all
work
 so
machines
 will help them to finish their task.
On the other hand
 , there are some drawbacks for
people
 to use
machines
 for
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task
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tasks
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 at
home
.
Firstly
, it has been proven by science,
people
 can only survive by working if they are working
then
 their body parts are
also
 working. If folks have fully depended on technology for finishing all works,
then
 they become lethargic and it becomes
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extremely negative for our health .
Besides
this
, some
people
 do jobs at
home
 as a helper and make money because of
this
 they can complete their daily needs. If all things are done by
machines
then
 ,
people
 do not have need helpers and needy
people
 become jobless. In conclusion , thanks to modern machinery
people
 will have taken big time for themselves while these things stand up some problems to those for
people
 who depend on that's
work

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