Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness to what extent do you agree with this statement

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Nowadays, many people say

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does not necessarily guarantee

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. I partly agree with

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opinion. On the one hand, I agree that

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does not necessarily guarantee

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. The

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is when we have a lot of money and property, we often worry about protecting it. That affects the mind and will make you feel stressed. It

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affects the way you treat others and create distance from other relationships. The

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is there are other things that can make you happy. In fact,

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, we

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have many other things that make us happy.

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, I feel very happy to live with my family and we can take care, talk, have fun together every day or simply I see them healthy. Another example, parents feel happy when their children grow up and succeed.

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, I think

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has some benefit to our

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. Of course, if you are a poor person, you don't have enough money to pay for your life. That will make you unhappy.

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wealth

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gives you what you want.

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, My best friend is rich, she bought limited edition bags. When the Iphone13 started selling, because it was very expensive many people couldn't buy it right away, but she was able to buy it.

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wealth

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gives you freedom. When you are rich you can hire people to help you work. You will have more time to rest and take care of yourself and your family health. In conclusion, I agree that

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does not necessarily guarantee

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, I think

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has some benefits to our

happiness

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Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness to what extent do you agree with this statement

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