The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
Since the beginning of mankind, there is evidence that men used to find food for the family
while
women
took concern for the offspring. Therefore
, through evolution, males got strong enough to fight, and face different kinds of situations while
females became emotionally strong enough to tackle family problems and take concern for offspring. Hence
, most people
believe that taking care of children
and household situations is entirely up to women
. But the world has changed so fast over the last
two decades and females have started to earn like males. Thus
, if a baby of a working mom starts to struggle with life, the public does not hesitate to blame the mother for that. However
, I strongly disagree with the fact that babies are entirely women
’s responsibility. In this
essay, I will discuss further
about my opinion.
In today’s world, even though, gentlemen work as hard as they can it is not enough for a family to function since the needs have risen with globalization. Even, basic needs like medications have become very expensive with age. Therefore
, working women
is a timely requirement. And, it is not like the good old days when Change preposition
with women
people
used to hunt and wear leaves. These days people
must earn money to buy all those things. Consequently
, women
feel the difficulty of requesting money from men every occasion they need something. Thus
, women
have chosen to work for their requirements which I think is the right thing to do.
Although
, at first,
people
were against the idea of working women
, now the public has understood that it is helpful to maintain a family. Accordingly
, I believe that if women
help to earn, men should help women
to take care of descendants because they are not purely female’s responsibility. I agree with the fact that offspring can have so many problems since their parents
are not with them. For example
, I had both my parents
with me while
growing up therefore
, I had the smoothest childhood since I had listeners whenever I had a problem. I think even though the mother will not be able to be with the juvenile all day, children
will not face juvenile delinquency if both parents
can spend their leisure time with the kid, doing something the kid likes.
To conclude
, although
, I agree with the fact that children
can experience bad situations due to
the unavailability of listeners, I think it is not purely up to mom. Father has a responsibility too. Children
can have a better life if both parents
take obligation for their descendants.Submitted by g.chamodi94 on
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