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The diagram shows how coal is used to generate
electricity
. The flow chart illustrates the way in which coals are used for
electricity
 generating. Overall, there are 6 distinct stages in the whole
electricity producing
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 process, beginning with the extracting coals from mountains and ending with the transporting
electricity
 to the power line for consuming that.
To begin
 with, the coal is extracted from mountains and
then
, through a particular roller device is entered to a machine which is crashed them by making use of two pulverises which is situated in the middle of
this
 machine.
Next
, these crashed coals are heated in a furnace. In the following stage, the long pipe transfers
electricity
 between the cooler and turbine
that is
 warmed up in
this
 furnace. In the subsequent stage, the heated
electricity
 is gone to the generator and the following
this
, the power which
producing
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 by the generator is transported to the specific transformer.
Finally
, the
electricity
 is converted to power lines and prepared for consumers
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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