Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

309 words

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Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Describe a science subject (Biology, Robotics, etc.) that you are interested in.

In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

What problems does cybercrime cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and business to take?