The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

Seasonal changes always bring new diseases and health problems to every country in the world. In view of

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suggest that government should fund the prevention of health problems and illness

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of treatment and medicine. In my perspective,

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precaution is important, afterwards medical treatments are

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essential.

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, the government should invest higher funds to maintain the cleanliness of a country.

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approach will lead to

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of infectious virus outbreaks which is often caused by poor hygiene of the place. To illustrate more, a recent report published by

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health organization states

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90

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of deadly virus outbreaks are the cause of an unhealthy environment.

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, the authorities should invest more money in medical research to protect humans from any arising epidemic. Scientists can find the root cause of any disease to end it before, it's become a deadly epidemic

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apparently would cost billions of

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expenses to save human lives.

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many governments spend a

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capital funds to treat

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from cancer illness,

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it is increasing day by day. By making

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aware

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of cancer can

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in

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cases. To sum up, It is proven by

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science that many diseases are preventable. So government should invest more money

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preventable measures to protect

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from getting ill.