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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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People
 have different views about the improvement in medical care, which leads to
people
 are living longer and
life
expectancy
 is increasing. In my opinion, I believe that advantages outweigh disadvantages. On the one hand, there are several benefits when
people
’s
life
 is longer.
Firstly
, longer
life
expectancy
 gives
people
 more chances to serve their country for a long period and contribute their talent for the
develop
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 of
nation
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the nation
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. Many professionals like teachers,
politician
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politicians
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, researchers, mathematicians, writers and so on can contribute more to their
matured
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 and older ages.
Secondly
, the longer
life
expectancy
 will let the grandparents spend more time with their grandsons and granddaughters. They will teach them about values and traditions. The new generation will
also
 learn the past history which is important for
improvement
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 of the country.
On the other hand
, there is a drawback
for
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this
 statement.
That is
 out of resources. Many countries are facing
with
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starvation and poverty as food production is not enough to feed
people
 around the world, when
people
 live longer, there will be more
people
are
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 not
accept
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 to retire at
early
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 age.
This
 will lead to unemployment for
young
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the young
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 generation. Many young
people
 will not
able
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 to get a job because old
people
 will hold these positions. In conclusion, I believe that longer
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life
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lifer
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life
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expectancy
 has more advantages than disadvantages.
Life
 is very important and
government
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the government
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 should invest more money in
health
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the health
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 care system in any way possible. To
people
 live longer and contribute to their family and country for as long as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • elderly population
  • health care systems
  • pension funds
  • extended family relationships
  • quality of life
  • aging population
  • economic growth
  • volunteer work
  • expertise
  • financial planning
  • retirement
  • age-related diseases
  • medical research
  • healthier lifestyles
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