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Some people say that public sports facilities improve people health problems. Others argue that this development has insignificant effects on public health. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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While some
citizens
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 argue that the provision of public
sports
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 facilities has
tremendous
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 effect on improving
the
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public
health
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,others,
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,think that it has no considerable impact on the
health
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 of general
citizens
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.
This
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 essay examines both views and explains why I think the need for a physical facility is incredibly important. On one hand,many
citizens
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 and I believe that the development of
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a centre
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 for physical activities can have a considerable effect on the mind and body well-being of individuals.If
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access to facilities
such
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 as tennis,badminton and other
sports
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 are provided at an affordable,reasonable price,people do not fear to step out to spend their
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 exercising.
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,any free or cost-effective provisions,motivate dwellers to challenge their comfort zone.
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,the major cause of obesity,which is, less bodily movements can be eliminated.So,the
health
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 complications can be minimised to a greater extent.
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,few others defend that there is no need for any capital investment in physical activity centres.For these people,the
citizens
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 of the nation have no
time
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,amidst their tightly packed work schedule.Despite the construction of a greatly attractive
sports
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 facility,non-availability of
time
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 will only result in a huge loss of money. Evidently,individuals do not find
time
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 to stand and stare,or
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,more specifically, the
sports
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 buildings are no benefit for the general public.
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,more awareness can be instigated for the reduced intake of junk and unhealthy products. In conclusion,despite the belief of few that funding in
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 wouldn’t benefit human society as there is not enough
time
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 for them to utilise the facility,like many others,I strongly agree with the plan of introducing recreational centres for the
health
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 benefits of all.
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,it is strongly recommended for the emergence of leisure activities.

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