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Band 6.5

– A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give contact details for when you are away, give instructions about how to care for your pet, describe other household duties you would like your friend to undertake. When giving contact details, you do NOT need to write any addresses; something like the name of a friend you are staying with or a holiday destination is fine. The format for this IELTS Writing task is simple. Just begin your letter as follows: letter Dear .....................,

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Dear Rachel, Thank you for agreeing to look after my house and my dog, Rocky,
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 I’m on vacation in Bali for a week. I genuinely appreciate your support. I am very confident that you will be able to take care of Rocky. You will only have to check
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 him in the mornings and evenings. Please refill his bowl of water and food twice a day. He might persuade you to give him more food, but please do not do that
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 it could affect his stomach.
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, I will keep some medicines that he might need
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 in the cabinet beside the bookshelf in the lounge. In case you need an extra hand to take care of Rocky, please call Nikki on her new phone number: 845-721-0001.
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, I request you to water the plants in the garden on alternate days. I am sorry for the inconvenience to your schedule. I will leave a note on the dining table, consisting of detailed instructions to take care of my dog and house, for your reference. I look forward to hearing from you. Lots of love, Krithi

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Add your contact details when you are away. This part is missing.
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Say more about house jobs, like keys, bins, lights, or mail.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. This will make it more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like also, if, and while with care. Too many long lines can be hard to read.
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The tone is warm and kind, which fits a letter to a friend.
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You give clear pet care steps about food, water, and medicine.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to
  • I wanted to thank you
  • In case of any emergencies
  • Please make sure to
  • Feed
  • Walk
  • Clean
  • Water
  • Take care of
  • Other household duties
  • Maintain
  • Keep an eye on
  • Collect
  • Water the plants
  • Mow the lawn
  • Sort the mail
  • Keep the house clean and tidy
  • Take any necessary actions
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