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The line chart illustrates the change in the daily demand for
electricity
 in England during common days in winter and summer and overall the
electricity
 consumption in
cold
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the cold
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 season is twice higher than that in
hot
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a hot
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 one. In winter, from 35,000
units
 at midnight, the demand for
electricity
 increases to its peak at just
blow
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below
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 40,000
units
 at about 3
o’clock
, before declining to the lowest point at a little over 30,000
units
 during the following 6 hours.
However
, the day saw a gradual growth, with about 44,000 consumed at about 21
o’clock
, which is the highest amount in the whole day. In summer, its
electricity
 is less fluctuated and more
electricity
 is used during the time from 12-24
o’clock
, during which time there
are
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 two
peak
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peaks
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 at about 20,000
units
 at around 14 and 23
o’clock
. The pie chart presents what
the
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electricity
 is used for in a normal English home. It is clear that more than half
electricity
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the electricity
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 is used to
heating
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 rooms and water. Lighting, TV, and radio consume the same percentage of
electricity
 with vacuum cleaners, food
mixer
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mixers
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, electric tools (15%).
Therefore
, the reason why winter’s
electricity
 consumption is higher is clear: residents need to use
electricity
 to heat
room
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rooms
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 and water.
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