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Some people say that it is impossible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that a country can not have a successful
economy
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 and a clean
environment
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 simultaneously. While
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 may work to a certain extent, I would argue that there are many ways to be successful in
both
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fields
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. On the one hand, it is difficult for the
government
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 to remain a
success
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 in the
economy
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 and keep the
environment
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 clean at the same time. The main reason is that some
countries
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 do not have enough resources to achieve their goals in
both
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fields
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.
Both
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economy
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 and
environment
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 will require a
lot
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 of money and humans to operate and gain
success
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, meanwhile, some developing
countries
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 would rather focus on the
economy
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 than the
environment
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 to improve their average income and get out of poverty.
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, these
countries
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 will make all efforts to improve the economic
fields
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, which causes some barriers to
have
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 a clean
environment
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.
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, Viet Nam is a developing country and the problem of the
environment
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 still occurs frequently because the governments use almost their budget for construction which can release a
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 of waste to the
environment
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 but they do not spend money on improving
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 entirely.
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, I disagree with the above mentioned for two reasons.
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, There are a
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 of ways to get
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 in
both
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fields
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.
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, Singapore is the cleanest country in the world and it can
also
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 remain a strong
economy
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 as well. The Singapore
government
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 has published politics to raise their
citizens
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 awareness of environmental protection, their schools not only educate the academic knowledge but
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 teach them to protect their habitats.
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,
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 some developing
countries
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 like Viet Nam can gain
success
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 in the long run as the
government
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 has encouraged businesses to organize some green marketing activities which can improve the
environment
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 and increase the brand attitude of customers.
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 will contribute to
both
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fields
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. In Conclusion, while there may be hard for the
government
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 to manage the two industries, there is a
lot
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 of methods to be economically successful without damaging the
environment
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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