Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

The line graph below illustrates the number of tourists in a
million
units that had visited a Caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017. Overall, the
visitors
are divided into 2 categories which are
visitors
that stay on ship and
visitors
that stay on the island.
Moreover
, there is a line which sums both types of travellers. The number of
visitors
had grown almost every year.
Consequently
, it shows significantly increasing
visitors
in 2017 (3.5
million
visitors
) compared to 2010(1
million
visitors
).
In addition
, the number of
visitors
staying on a cruise ship
was fluctuated
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from 2010 to 2010.
However
, from 2010 which there are around 250,000
visitors
staying on the ship to 2017 demonstrates a considerably improving trend from
this
type of visitor, there is around 2
million
visitors
for
this
category in 2017. The
visitors
which stay on land
also
indicates an increasing trend
in
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overall even though there is a fluctuation along the way. In 2010, around 750000 travellers stay on the island, whereas, in 2017, there is around 1.5
million
travellers that do the same thing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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