Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is a controversial topic that does offspring have the freedom to make
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. While some people support that it is good for
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’s growth, others argue that it should
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. In
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and explain my support of the latter one. It is true that
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can get experience from making
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. It can be more impressive than lectures.
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, when I was a child, I do not how dangerous it about play the door, even though my mother asked me to leave away from it many times. I knew that until I got hurt when I played with it once. After that, I get experience about leaving away something dangerous
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will get hurt. Apart from that, parents’ prevention may lead to opposite results that prompt
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to make
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. Because
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have the nature of strong curation with born which may lead them to try something was banned.
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, there are some reasons why I think that
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should stop
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from doing incorrect things.
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, some
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may damage
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health. Some serious
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like playing fire or jumping from a high stage are very dangerous.
Children
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do not know the effects what their behaviours will cause, so they do those dangerous things.
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must prevent them,
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otherwise
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children
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will get injured.
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, stealing or lettering public places is illegal. Parents must let their
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know and prevent them from doing
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.
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, they will be punished. In conclusion,
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children
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can learn something from making
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, I strongly support that
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should prevent them from avoiding result bad situations.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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