Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is a controversial topic that does offspring have the freedom to make
mistakes
. While some people support that it is good for
children
’s growth, others argue that it should
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by
adults
. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides of
argument
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and explain my support of the latter one. It is true that
children
can get experience from making
mistakes
. It can be more impressive than lectures.
For example
, when I was a child, I do not how dangerous it about play the door, even though my mother asked me to leave away from it many times. I knew that until I got hurt when I played with it once. After that, I get experience about leaving away something dangerous
otherwise
will get hurt. Apart from that, parents’ prevention may lead to opposite results that prompt
children
to make
mistakes
. Because
children
have the nature of strong curation with born which may lead them to try something was banned.
However
, there are some reasons why I think that
adults
should stop
children
from doing incorrect things.
Firstly
, some
mistakes
may damage
children
health. Some serious
mistakes
like playing fire or jumping from a high stage are very dangerous.
Children
do not know the effects what their behaviours will cause, so they do those dangerous things.
Adults
must prevent them,
,
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otherwise
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children
will get injured.
Secondly
, stealing or lettering public places is illegal. Parents must let their
children
know and prevent them from doing
this
.
Otherwise
, they will be punished. In conclusion,
although
children
can learn something from making
mistakes
, I strongly support that
adults
should prevent them from avoiding result bad situations.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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