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Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is a controversial topic that does offspring have the freedom to make
mistakes
. While some people support that it is good for
children
’s growth, others argue that it should
be prevent
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 by
adults
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of
argument
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 and explain my support of the latter one. It is true that
children
 can get experience from making
mistakes
. It can be more impressive than lectures.
For example
, when I was a child, I do not how dangerous it about play the door, even though my mother asked me to leave away from it many times. I knew that until I got hurt when I played with it once. After that, I get experience about leaving away something dangerous
otherwise
 will get hurt. Apart from that, parents’ prevention may lead to opposite results that prompt
children
 to make
mistakes
. Because
children
 have the nature of strong curation with born which may lead them to try something was banned.
However
, there are some reasons why I think that
adults
 should stop
children
 from doing incorrect things.
Firstly
, some
mistakes
 may damage
children
 health. Some serious
mistakes
 like playing fire or jumping from a high stage are very dangerous.
Children
 do not know the effects what their behaviours will cause, so they do those dangerous things.
Adults
 must prevent them,
,
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otherwise
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children
 will get injured.
Secondly
, stealing or lettering public places is illegal. Parents must let their
children
 know and prevent them from doing
this
.
Otherwise
, they will be punished. In conclusion,
although
children
 can learn something from making
mistakes
, I strongly support that
adults
 should prevent them from avoiding result bad situations.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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