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Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

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Technology has made incredible advancements in the past decade. The
Internet
 has taken the world by storm. Today everyone has access to
information
 through mobile phones and computers. I do believe that these gadgets are taking place of the
books
.
However
, I
also
 agree that
books
 still hold their special place. It is a fact that a wide percentage of the population now owns devices
such
 as mobile phones, tablets and laptops. Any
information
 today is just a few clicks away.
Firstly
, the
internet
 serves as a huge source of data and with the development of search engines and mobile applications,
people
 don't have to wait for a book or a concerned person to acquire knowledge about any topic.
Secondly
, the
internet
also
 has many applications
such
 as youtube, online games and ebooks to keep
people
 entertained and
people
 don't have to spend on
books
 for that.
Furthermore
, social media sites like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram etc. serve as both, a source of
information
 as well as entertainment.
However
, not everything available on the
internet
 can be trusted. A great deal of
information
 is incorrect and misleading.
Also
, spending too much time in front of the screen is not good for eye health.
People
 still go to the libraries and book shops in huge numbers which proves that there is a significant number of book lovers that continue to enjoy buying and reading
books
. Reading would continue to be a popular and favourite pastime for
people
, be it now or in the future. To conclude, I would say that
although
 the
internet
 has served as a great source of knowledge and entertainment
but
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people
 would continue to adore
books
 and
books
 would not lose their shine.
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