You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter Say how you feel about his performance Give details of your musical activities Explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Sir.Roger Waters, I am writing to congratulate you on your outstanding performance in Amsterdam. I have been a huge fan of your work for many years now, and I think your staging is still the most stunning performance one could ever witness. It is simply breathtaking. My main activity is sound/audio engineering and I am

also

involved with music production. I have been working for two years, and I believe at my age, 17, I am an aspiring musician and I have developed some good skills. As you were a former band member of Pink Floyd and the co-founder of the band, I am pretty sure that you were the most influential member in terms of production. Due to the fact that all the albums are conceptual, and mostly the ideas were from you, I was wondering if you could provide me with mentorship and share some tips with me on how to come up with ideas. Once again I would like to thank you for your contribution to the music world. Yours sincerely, Mani Mofidi

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

177 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

stellar performance
captivating
musical prowess
talent
repertoire
collaboration
mentorship
resonate
aspiring musician
composition
rendition
inspirational
vocal range
harmonize
skillset

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