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There are social, medical, and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of mobile phones?

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It is undeniable that mobile
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 bring ease to our society and most tasks are done by them. But, it is argued that social, medical, and technical problems which are caused by the use of cell
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 override its advantages.
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, I disagree with
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 argument and I will justify my support in
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 regard. Each new invention has its own pros and cons, and mobile
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 are no exception. Turn to drawbacks, most people have access to social media and the preference for communicating face to face has declined among people.
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 is why disorders like social anxiety and depression have increased dramatically in the world.
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, children spend a great deal of their time on
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 device rather than playing outdoor games, so their sedentary lifestyle starts at a tender age, and as we all know having inactive life lead to a lot of health problems
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 as diabetes.
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, it is reported that turning on electronic devices on aeroplanes have adverse effects on navigation systems.
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, mobile
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 make our lives much more convenient.
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 of standing in long lines in banks which is a time-consuming activity, the mobile phone provides us with applications with which only one click can pay our bills and transfer money. We are able to attend online classes all over the world as well and boost our knowledge by using the Internet. In conclusion, it is true that mobile
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 have seen some disadvantages under certain circumstances, but I believe their benefits in terms of practical applications and easy access to a great amount of information outweigh the disadvantages.
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