the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
The given line graphs illustrate the percentage of households including electronic equipment and
number
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the number
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of hours spent
for
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housework during a week from 1920 to 2019
Overall
, the first graph indicates the upward trends in three households with electronic appliances
while
second
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the second
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one reports
downward
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a downward
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in
number
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the number
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of hours of housework The refrigerator was at its lowest amount
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which
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was 0% in 1920 and
vacuum
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the vacuum
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cleaner was at 30 % at that time. After that, both figures saw
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dramatic increases until 1980 to 100 % and 80 % respectively.
Then
,
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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remained stable for 20 years and stopped in 2020.
However
, the vacuum cleaner grew up slightly to 100 % in the following year and stayed unchanged until 2019. In terms of washing
machine
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machines
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, there was a fluctuation during these 5 decades. The time spent
to use
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these households decreased moderately from 50 % to 10% during these periods.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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