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Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

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It is true that more and more
students
 are choosing to study at university in a foreign country. While there are certainly some drawbacks for
students
 who make
this
 decision, I believe that studying abroad is beneficial overall. On the one hand, there are several difficulties that overseas
students
 may experience.
Firstly
, they may find it necessary to improve their language skills in order to understand lectures and write assignments in a foreign language.
For example
, a Chinese student studying in Germany may need to take extra German lessons or seek help from a native speaker when it comes to editing written work.
Secondly
, international
students
 may struggle to cope with cultural differences, both in terms of social and academic conventions.
Finally
, living away from family and friends can be a daunting prospect, and some
students
 may feel lonely or homesick.
On the other hand
, attending a university course abroad can be extremely rewarding. The main benefit for many overseas
students
 is the opportunity to gain a qualification from a prestigious institution in a foreign country. A degree from
such
 an institution may improve a graduate’s job prospects, opening the door for a successful career in his or her chosen field.
For instance
, a degree from Harvard or Oxford is likely to impress potential employers
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 and put graduates in a great position to secure a job in one of the world’s best companies. The other advantage of studying abroad is more personal; it can help to broaden
student's
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 horizons, gain different experiences, and introduce them to a new network of friends.
Lastly
, there are several benefits for their own,
such
 as broadening their horizons, new life perspectives, different experiences and a new network of friends.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • career prospects
  • cultural exposure
  • global perspective
  • networking opportunities
  • personal growth
  • financial burden
  • tuition fees
  • living expenses
  • travel costs
  • homesickness
  • cultural shock
  • personal well-being
  • recognition of degrees
  • academic terminology
  • communication nuances
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