IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#mass #communication #transport #societies #phenomenon #globalization #people #fear #loss #identity
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There is no doubt that these days societies are facing a phenomenon called
globalization
Use synonyms
. The question is that
globalization
Use synonyms
 going to lead to a complete loss of cultural identity? In my opinion,I think that
globalization
Use synonyms
 has a big impact on our communities. In terms of disadvantages,
globalization
Use synonyms
 has eradicated from peoples' heads their own religions. The main reason given to support
this
Linking Words
 claim is that a lot of Muslims nowadays are not practising their faith in an accurate way like in the past. And their faith now is intuitively affected by other religions around the world. To illustrate, some Arabic Muslims celebrate Christmas with their families in different cities in their countries and decorate their homes with Christmas trees.
In other words
Linking Words
, they are imitating the western culture which is prohibited in their religion and traditions.
Thus
Linking Words
, impact their relationship with their conservative societies.
However
Linking Words
, many
people
Use synonyms
 from different nations in the world respect their cultures, and they strongly believe that despite all of the developments which made the world a small valley and the ability
of
Replace the preposition
to
show examples
 connect between
people
Use synonyms
by
Change preposition
with
show examples
 a click on smart devices, nothing is going to change their beliefs.
For example
Linking Words
, Jewish
people
Use synonyms
 do not allow changes or any foreign habits which can alter their ways of worshipping their god.
Additionally
Linking Words
, many
people
Use synonyms
 exploit
globalization
Use synonyms
, and they consider it an opportunity to share a variety of traditions and festivals among
people
Use synonyms
. In conclusion,
although
Linking Words
globalization
Use synonyms
 has its pros, it has a big detrimental influence on our traditions.
Therefore
Linking Words
, I believe that
globalization
Use synonyms
 is a tip to go away from values and identities.
Submitted by nada.1421166 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: