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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reason? What are the effects on society and family life?

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It is true that these days the majority of populations aren't thinking about having offspring at an early age. In fact, there are a number of reasons for the argument and it
also
 impacted impact society and their family. Generally speaking, due to the disruption of culture in societies, having kids is no longer be the reason to compete 'Family'. In the past women tends to be the person who does child-rearing, but now they could have the right to fund their family as equal as men.
Therefore
 when they got a chance to experience new things they will not think about having heirs.
As a result
, there is an effect on the population rates of societies,
for example
, in China, recently they reported news about the lower rate of women's pregnancy, they will need to regulate policies to solve
this
 issue.
Moreover
, it was about the affordability of one's life. As we might have been known, having kids requires a large of money to support every aspect of their lives especially their education. Notably, if those of them need to put your offspring in a great school, there requires a huge tuition fee.
Therefore
, they will choose to seek money as much as they can before having kids
nevertheless
this
 could create a couples' problems easily because of their stress if they didn't meet their goals. To be concluded, having children after family are ready could impact both benefits and drawbacks to them. Most importantly, they should come up with a wisely future plan for what is good for them in the long term.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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