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Some sports are considered extremely dangerous, but many people still like them. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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Even though extreme
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 are usually associated with danger, many
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 tend to do them. Experiencing challenging situations which trigger adrenaline and require focus could be considered as the main reason for
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 tendency.
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, hazards related to these
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 could be alleviated by informing the public about them by the media and teaching enthusiasts proper methods of doing
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 rivalry by professionals. The major drive of those who take up extreme
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 would seem to lie in the feeling of joy these individuals experience after conquering the competition.
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, indeed, shows they are capable of overcoming distractions and that they have superb concentration.
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, their triumph indicates they are physically well-prepared and fit for the competition.
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 signs of capability alongside the sense of tension and joy leads fans of dangerous
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 to step in its path. Despite these feelings,
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 put their life at risk while they practice these
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 ranging from broken bones to death. In free solo,
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, the athlete should climb a high rock without any equipment which in case he/she slips, it would definitely be fatal. To mitigate the risks of dangerous
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 an obvious step would be for the media to inform society of the issues regarding these
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. Showing disabled
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 who cannot do their day-to-day activities as the result of doing sport with dangerous conditions fades the heroic images of those who climb icy rocks, and reveals the reality more clearly. Raising
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’s awareness could assist them while deciding to participate in
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. Another practical step to prevent miserable situations would be hiring professional athletes to teach and coach younger, more inexperienced ones who want to practice
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. Many
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 who are injured are usually not prepared for acute conditions.
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 training programs usually affect
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’s performance positively in hazardous situations.
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 way, many problems are predicted and well-treated in case of encountering. In conclusion,
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 doing some
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 are not recommended due to their harmful nature, some like to practice them anyway.
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, to avoid the negative consequences of these activities,
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 should be made aware of the dangers by media and training programs on how to do those
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 should be held by the government.
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