Should young people follow older people’s example or it’s good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A sizeable proportion of the society put forward an
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that youngsters must obey the instructions of elders, while, there is an equal proportion who consider young adults should be allowed to think and act independently. In
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both
these perspectives are discussed to arrive at an
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young ones should follow and obey the ideas and thoughts of ancestors.
This
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older
people
have
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of life
experience
and they are well equipped to solve a wide range of problems. Older
people
have immense knowledge and judgmental skills which they gained through their life
experience
as well as from their ancestors. They know different home remedies like traditional medicine for cold and cough and got all these from their ancestors.
Hence
, these are the reasons why certain
people
believe it is better to follow
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.
Nevertheless
, there are certain others who support that,
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to think and act independently. They put forward a strong reason that senior
people
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are outdated as they do not know much about modern technology. In detail, most of the older
people
do not know about the new applications of
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and
as a
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they are unaware
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the immense benefits offered by these
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. So, older
people
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against
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buying the latest
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smart phones
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as they opine that those gargets are very costly.
Furthermore
, most of the grandparents have the view that women need to do all household chores as it is their responsibility. As these days
both
the parents are working it is better to share house activities rather that women along doing all chores. As a consequence, a good number of
people
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that is
it good young
people
to think and act independently. In conclusion, after analyzing
both
the aspects of, following the older
people
’s vision and challenging their thoughts my perspective is that youngsters should consult elder’s
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as they have more
experience
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situation.
However
, in certain
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young ones need to
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their own decisions without depending on older
people
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likely to continue in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wisdom
  • Experience
  • Mistakes
  • Guidance
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Status quo
  • Fresh ideas
  • Perspective
  • Advancements
  • Societal harmony
  • Respecting
  • Adhering to
  • Generational conflicts
  • Mutual understanding
  • Progress
  • Evolve
  • Customs
  • Question
  • Reform
  • Outdated
  • Concepts
  • Drive progress
  • Critically evaluate
  • Balance
  • Tradition
  • Embracing
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