In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In
this
contemporary world,life
goes too fast so hard working
may be necessary.In some regions,it is believed that Replace the word
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children
should have much
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efforts
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effort
for
fulfiling their ambitions or Change preposition
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further
that. In this
essay,I will explore both pros and cons and draw some conclusions.
One of the major plus points of trying hard for their goal is the fact that having a life
with a high level of motivation is taught to younger people. Motivation plays a considerable role in people's lives, and I can say life
would not be possible without motivation. Another benefit is that this
suggestion to children
notify them how much hard-working is vital.In other words
,this
may alert them and make them think deeply about the future because ,at early ages,children
just think about simple work. For example
, consider a child who just devotes her/his time to play with her/his friends.When this
advice was told to them,they would allocate some time to choose a suitable way and put all her/his effort into their career.It means that they will be completely aware of the importance of hard-working.
Regarding disadvantages,one of the negative effects is that life
may be seen as too difficult and tedious because they should try more and more for earning a lot of things. For instance
,children
probably think that I may have challenging upcoming days,as a ,
result they would get disappointed at an early age, which may have a terrible effect on their mindset. One more thing, choosing an inappropriate approach to Remove the comma
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life
may occur,
since they want to get away from the difficulties.having said that Remove the comma
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children
may turn to drugs due to disappointment or they are likely to change their studies or work.For example
, children
who are interested in physics, but they heard that it is so challenging, therefore
,they may not choose their interest.
In conclusion,giving this
advice, like trying hard for life
is essential to children
some advantages and disadvantages.They may inspire by this
sentence or they may destroy their life
.In my view, it is definitely should be told,but I have a suggestion that parents must consider their age's children
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite