In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In
this
contemporary world,
life
goes too fast so hard
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may be necessary.In some regions,it is believed that
children
should have
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efforts
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fulfiling their ambitions or
further
that. In
this
essay,I will explore both pros and cons and draw some conclusions. One of the major plus points of trying hard for their goal is the fact that having a
life
with a high level of motivation is taught to younger people. Motivation plays a considerable role in people's lives, and I can say
life
would not be possible without motivation. Another benefit is that
this
suggestion to
children
notify them how much hard-working is vital.
In other words
,
this
may alert them and make them think deeply about the future because ,at early ages,
children
just think about simple work.
For example
, consider a child who just devotes her/his time to play with her/his friends.When
this
advice was told to them,they would allocate some time to choose a suitable way and put all her/his effort into their career.It means that they will be completely aware of the importance of hard-working. Regarding disadvantages,one of the negative effects is that
life
may be seen as too difficult and tedious because they should try more and more for earning a lot of things.
For instance
,
children
probably think that I may have challenging upcoming days,as a
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result they would get disappointed at an early age, which may have a terrible effect on their mindset. One more thing, choosing an inappropriate approach to
life
may occur
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since they want to get away from the difficulties.having said that
children
may turn to drugs due to disappointment or they are likely to change their studies or work.
For example
,
children
who are interested in physics, but they heard that it is so challenging,
therefore
,they may not choose their interest. In conclusion,giving
this
advice, like trying hard for
life
is essential to
children
some advantages and disadvantages.They may inspire by
this
sentence or they may destroy their
life
.In my view, it is definitely should be told,but I have a suggestion that parents must consider their age's
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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