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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is common for a student to take a gap-
year
 in a foreign country or even
work
 for a
year
 prior to
university
. Whether a student should engage in travelling or working before embarking on a formal qualification has been a topic of debate for various years.
Firstly
 the advantages of
such
 activities will be discussed, followed by all the economical disadvantages one encounters on
such
 endeavours. The benefits of resisting
university
 for a
year
 to travel or
work
 open the s
tudents
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student's
mind to new worlds,
such
 as having responsibility at
work
 or learning a new language abroad. Having spent a
year
 in Australia prior to
university
 I learnt how to look for
work
, become responsible with finances and other essential life skills
such
 as cooking. Upon starting
university
 various tasks
such
 as money management and employment were
second
 n
ature
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nature, thus
thus
 allowing more time for studies. Without having gone abroad
university
 life would undoubtedly be more challenging. The disadvantages are mainly cost related, the airfare, travel insurance, national insurance and personal living costs are large sums.
H
owever finding
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However, finding
another opportunity to go abroad is difficult once the pattern of normal life is resumed.
In a
ddition it
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addition, it
also
 an opportunity to experiment with different jobs before choosing a career at
u
niversity.
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the university
T
herefore there
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Therefore, there
is a considerable advantage of taking a
year
 out before higher education. To conclude, the main disadvantages are the costs involved,
however
 the benefits dramatically outweigh the disadvantages. Time should be spent wisely as it can never be recuperated unlike m
oney which
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money, which
can be spent and earned.

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