Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some individuals believe that increasing the number of sports facilities is the most effective approach for public
health
development, while others are of the opinion that this
is not enough to cope with the problem and it is necessary to use other methods in order to achieve the goal. This
essay agree
with the latter point and will show that Change the verb form
agrees
although
having several public stadiums can motivate people
to participate in athletic activities, education plays the
key Correct article usage
a
roles
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role
for
improving public Change preposition
in
health
in the long run.
It is argued that the more available places for physical activity, the more opportunities for people
to do more exercise. This
is because they have multiple choices to choose which exercise is suit them the most. Moreover
, when they decide to continue doing this
workout everyday
, it turns out to be their daily Replace the word
every day
routines
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routine
which
can help them have a healthy lifestyle. Correct pronoun usage
that
For example
, there is an upward trend among the elderly in Bangkok who enjoy doing yoga in their free time since numerous yoga classes provided
by the government. Add a missing verb
are provided
However
, I believe that in order to develop the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
, other measures are required.
Giving people
an
information Remove the article
apply
of
how important their Change preposition
about
health
is
not only the best way to encourage them to have a healthier life but Add a missing verb
is is
also
leading
to Wrong verb form
leads
sustainable
development of public Add an article
the sustainable
health
. If everyone have
Change the verb form
has
an appropriate knowledge
, they will have their own awareness and take Remove the article
appropriate knowledge
a piece of appropriate knowledge
a
good responsibility Remove the article
apply
of
their Change preposition
for
health
automatically such
as reducing the amount of unhealthy food and consuming healthier ones. To illustrate, students from well-known
Add an article
a well-known
university
in Bangkok think of the hazardous effects of drinking alcohol. Fix the agreement mistake
universities
As a result
, they try to quit drinking and persuade their friends to do so.
In conclusion, even if the increasing number of sports stadiums can support people
to do more exercise, this
not
enough for the development of the public Add a missing verb
is not
health
system. This
is the reason why education is required.Submitted by Varaiphand on
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