Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that increasing the number of sports facilities is the most effective approach for public
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development, while others are of the opinion that
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is not enough to cope with the problem and it is necessary to use other methods in order to achieve the goal.
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with the latter point and will show that
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having several public stadiums can motivate
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to participate in athletic activities, education plays
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improving public
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in the long run.  It is argued that the more available places for physical activity, the more opportunities for
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to do more exercise.
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is because they have multiple choices to choose which exercise is suit them the most.
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, when they decide to continue doing
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, it turns out to be their daily
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can help them have a healthy lifestyle.
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, there is an upward trend among the elderly in Bangkok who enjoy doing yoga in their free time since numerous yoga classes
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by the government.
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, I believe that in order to develop
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public
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, other measures are required.  Giving
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information
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how important their
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not only the best way to encourage them to have a healthier life but
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development of public
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. If everyone
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an appropriate knowledge
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, they will have their own awareness and take
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good responsibility
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their
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as reducing the amount of unhealthy food and consuming healthier ones. To illustrate, students from
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university
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in Bangkok think of the hazardous effects of drinking alcohol.
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, they try to quit drinking and persuade their friends to do so. In conclusion, even if the increasing number of sports stadiums can support
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to do more exercise,
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enough for the development of the public
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system.
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is the reason why education is required.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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