The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the envirnonment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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There is an old proverb which states "We do not inherit the land from our ancestors, rather we borrow it from our children". Some people believe the environment should be protected and
therefore
companies
which cannot treat their
waste
should be closed. I believe
this
is something to consider and so I agree with
this
statement. In
this
essay I will discuss the other solutions, should closure not be a viable option. Producing toxic
waste
materials has a two-fold problem. Not only does it harm the environment, but
also
the people working there. These people require justice.
For instance
, clothing
companies
send orders to third-world countries like Bangladesh, in order to profit from cheap labour. These clothing
companies
, who are notorious for being part of the fast fashion industry, exploit these workers endlessly. Children and women are given tasks of handling polyurethane without protective gear, leaving them with irritated skin.
This
is one of many examples of how toxic
waste
can hurt humans. When these materials are discarded, it is fed into the rivers. The corrosive
waste
products pollute the rivers and the water sources, killing the organisms that live there.
Consequently
,
this
results in the death of aquatic organisms. Sometimes, these
companies
are necessary for one reason or another. They could have a knock-on effect on the communities,
such
as the ability to make a livelihood. In
this
case, there would be an argument to consider another solution. If there were measures taken to implement fines on these
companies
, they would consider the impact of their actions.
For example
, giving
companies
a fine proportionate to their
waste
means the bigger conspirators would be handed a larger fine. In my opinion, fines and other solutions can solve the bigger problem, rather than the closure of these
companies
. There are many aspects to consider before completely shutting it down. Fundamentally, the goal is zero
waste
, but until
then
we must take measures which consider all the victims in the scenario.
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task achievement
While the essay presents a compelling argument with relevant examples, it could benefit from the inclusion of a counterargument. Addressing potential objections would demonstrate a more nuanced understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is distinctly focused on a single main idea. This will help in clearly conveying the message and maintaining the reader's interest throughout the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets the stage for the essay, providing a clear statement of the writer's position and outlining the main points to be discussed.
logical structure
The essay displays a logical structure, with clear progression from one point to the next, making it easy to follow the writer’s line of reasoning.
supported main points
Relevant and specific examples were used to support the main points, adding depth and persuasiveness to the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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