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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on the course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear Sir, My name is
John
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john
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smith
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Smith
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 and I have enrolled myself in the three months cooking
course
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 named
as
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apply
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Chinese and Indian Cuisine that was initiated on
7th
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the 7th
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 of September. I am writing
this
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 letter to provide the feedback for an amazing
course
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 which actually helped me a lot to learn the basics to advance
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 of cooking in a very short period of time.
To begin
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 with, I am very thankful to the wonderful staff who was very skilled in cooking amazing dishes and the way of teaching is very much
appreciative
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 as they used to teach in an effective and
entertainingmanner
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entertaining manner
. Learning is fun when learned from
such
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 type of talented staff.
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, after completion of my
course
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, I felt very confident and excited about both
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cuisines .
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, I felt motivated and started cooking dishes for my family
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 weekends
instead
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 of buying
this
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 cuisine from outside and now it is loved and praised by all my family members.
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, it would be very much interesting, if you will introduce other cuisines courses as well
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 as Italian, Mexican etc. It will be very much
pleasure
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 for me to learn
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type
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 of
course
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 with a very talented and amazing staff. Thanks for asking
the
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 feedback and it was a very wonderful journey. Yours faithfully, Harpreet
Submitted by harpreet19071994 on

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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