You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on the course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

Dear Sir, My name is
John
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smith
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and I have enrolled myself in the three months cooking
course
named
as
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Chinese and Indian Cuisine that was initiated on
7th
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of September. I am writing
this
letter to provide the feedback for an amazing
course
which actually helped me a lot to learn the basics to advance
level
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of cooking in a very short period of time.
To begin
with, I am very thankful to the wonderful staff who was very skilled in cooking amazing dishes and the way of teaching is very much
appreciative
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as they used to teach in an effective and
entertainingmanner
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. Learning is fun when learned from
such
type of talented staff.
Moreover
, after completion of my
course
, I felt very confident and excited about both
the
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cuisines .
Consequently
, I felt motivated and started cooking dishes for my family
in
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weekends
instead
of buying
this
cuisine from outside and now it is loved and praised by all my family members.
Furthermore
, it would be very much interesting, if you will introduce other cuisines courses as well
such
as Italian, Mexican etc. It will be very much
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for me to learn
such
type
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of
course
with a very talented and amazing staff. Thanks for asking
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feedback and it was a very wonderful journey. Yours faithfully, Harpreet
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • moreover
  • also
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