Some people believe positive thinking has benefits, while others consider it has drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is an often argued issue whether optimistic is good or bad by many debates and TV shows.

However

, while some think that positive thinking gives more

advanatges

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advantages

, others say that

this

trend has some

disadvandages

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disadvantages

too.

This

essay discusses both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, positive thinking can

stimulte

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go to the

level even got

any

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failure in

life

;

this

can be enhanced

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ours

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' hope and

believe

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in the particular matter.

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, people can do anything whatever

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want without any

fearness

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fairness

fears

and

this

can give

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them more

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confidence too.

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, Indian army

warriers

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warriors

have taken to theirs' own area from China occupied border in Vaga; the spoke man said that about

this

victory all the

warriers

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warriors

had positive thought,

hence

, we achieved

this

Therefore

, if a person has positive thoughts, he would be achieved anything in his

life

and

this

can be motivated in all

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to do something in

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Woodway

On the other hand

this

trend has some drawbacks undoubtedly; always being

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optimistic is not possible and

this

can forget to

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analyse

what are the consequences will appear. Analysing all the sides like positive

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negatives is the best planning of

life

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positive thinking can be ended with

failiures

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failures

failure

For instance

, in the pandemic

situation

the authority has only positive thinking

besides

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do to rescue folks from

dangerous

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virus

such

as corona, as consequences, the death rate will be increased tremendously,

hence

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side of thinking is the best for avoiding

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situation

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. To conclude, positive thinking gives more confidence, hope, and

believe

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to folks can achieve anything

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theirs'

life

related to

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victory

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both sides positive and negative can avoid

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facing any hazardous

situation

. Even though, in my opinion, about

this

, positive thinking has more benefits than drawbacks. I hope

this

process is conducive to being a confident person

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the world.

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