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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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it is considered that National with a length of midpoint hour is more financially grateful than other nations. which do not have long employment time. I partially disagree with the above-said statement.
however
, it depends on the
country
. how long they sl allow us to
work
. I would like to explain it at length in the paragraph to come. to commencing with, some
countries
 technology increasing gradually.
Thus
 there are many opportunities to do
work
.
Firstly
, some
countries
 do smart
work
 rather than doing hard
work
.
for example
, China has overtaken
America
 to become the richest
country
. whereas
America
 was once the richest
country
. reason being
America
 invited many technologies
second
, side China only used technology which invented invention by
America
.
finally
, we can say that China did smart
work
 due to which his financial condition is so good.
furthermore
, some
countries
 are lack opportunities. These
people
 are doing so much hard
work
. while
,
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 they do not earn money according to works.
for example
, in India
people
 do
work
 for around 12 to 14 hours including educated
people
 and uneducated
people
.
therefore
, educated
people
 go to the richest
countries
 to earn good money according to their profession and go there and pay tax their
country
.
Hence
,
that is
 the reason some
countries
 are more economically strong. in conclusion, in my ,opinion that it is the responsibility of the government to increase the source of income in their
countries
 and give the money according to
work
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic success
  • working hours
  • productivity
  • sustainable development
  • work-life balance
  • labor laws
  • efficiency
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • burnout
  • occupational health
  • technological innovation
  • industrialized nations
  • emerging economies
  • workforce
  • competitiveness
  • workplace culture
  • employee turnover
  • quality of life
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