Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree ?
With the development of
science
various aspects of the convocation Add a comma
,science
also
improved , including those which needed more human power previously. But, some are arguing about reducing the time which allocates
to work for employers. I totally disagree with Wrong verb form
allocated
this
argument mainly because new technology can not replace human ability completely.
Recent
Add an article
The recent
improvement
Fix the agreement mistake
improvements
of
new technology in multiple sectors Change preposition
in
have
reduced the need for manpower involvement. Change the verb form
has
This
is mainly in the industrial sector , but in most developed countries it has replaced the day to day travelling as well. For example
in Japan and USA, most of the vehicles on the road are capable of auto driving. On the other hand
, most of the industries which including textile, tyre and automobile manufacturing are computerized and involve minimal manual labour-power. These new robots have invaded the service sector , which reduces the man involved in services
like room services
, catering and receptionist
. All of these modern developments have reduced the manual labour-power which previously used in those fields .
Due to these new developments , most people around the globe are arguing about reducing the working hours for workers. Fix the agreement mistake
receptionists
Although
this
may be correct in certain aspects of the work , most of the time human capabilities cannot be replaced by a machine. For example , in the medical sector , the services
provided by doctors or nurses cannot be completely replaced . In a healthcare facility like hospitals, if the human working hours get limited , it will lead to multiple complications like shortage of workers and limitation in services
.
In summary , the advancement of automation has led to the limitation of human involvement in most of the services
recently. Although
some people argue to limit the working time of the people , it is mostly unrealistic since most of the human services
which are provided cannot be replaced by the mechanical brain.Submitted by mngldissanayaka on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
