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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state which one do you think is better. Give reasons and relevant examples for your answer.

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Marriage
 is one of the most meaningful events for every adult. Obviously, there are many different civilizations in the world. In some countries, spouses will be decided by
parents
.
On the other hand
,
people
 choose their partner on their own and I wholeheartedly agree with
this
 statement. It is obvious that couples who were arranged by their
parents
 hardly have a happy
life
.
For example
, in modern
life
, Vietnamese women still must get married to a partner whom they do not have special
love
 eventually have not seen yet. It is many cases that
parents
 let their kids married for money, a reputation that will destroy the spouse
life
. It is clear that
marriage
 needs
love
 from both sides,
parents
 arrange their kids for
love
 cannot help the kid
life
, just only make their
love
 become worse. I strongly believe that
marriage
 should be made by two
people
 who are falling in
love
 with each other.
This
 shows that couples who are married by real
love
 feel more freedom than any others,
love
 which come from two sides could make
people
 stay together longer than
parents
 arranged.
For example
, in Western countries,
people
 are not allowed their
parents
 to choose partners because of the importance of
marriage
. Living with someone who already is known is always easier than with parent choice. To sum up, everyone needs a period of time for understanding others in every aspect. Married couples arranged by
parents
 for every reason will never have a happy ending.
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