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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
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various
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 to educate the brain
such
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 and so on.
However
, some people think that knowledge from reading is better than watching
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television
. In
this
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this
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the main role
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these days and
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everyone
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 daily life.
Consequently
,
television
 is one of the choices which the majority of people select to learn because it is easy to understand and access.
Firstly
, watching from the channel can
understand
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 easier than text because of the motion picture or sound.
For example
, we can use the sample of voice and image from broadcast series to improve
skill
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.
In contrast
, studying from
book
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 feel boring and quit
this
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 time. To illustrate, when they look
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 the book which have entire
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the
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word, it is hard for intending
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development
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skill
. On the one hand,
modern
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 method is
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 for thinking fantasy and learning new language
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due to
 the time. It is true that
learner
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learners
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 who obtain knowledge from
screen
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 can accomplish faster than
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 from papers.
According to digital
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 lesson,
it
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provides distinct
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 which focus only on usable data.
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, broadcast
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television
 present with detail and do not show the intro so much.
Furthermore
, someone who
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 weak in
reading
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skill
 must waste
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time more than other people.
Therefore
,
television
 is helpful for
this
 group because they can listen and look
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 picture
instead
. In conclusion,
it is clear that
due to
 the new technology and the specific feature that affects the thought processes,
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 have a more obvious advantage over the book and can improve language skills and imagination.
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