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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
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It may seem that we have
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various
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 to educate the brain
such
 as imagination, linguistics,
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 and so on.
However
, some people think that knowledge from reading is better than watching
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television
. In
this
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this
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the main role
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these days and
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everyone
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 daily life.
Consequently
,
television
 is one of the choices which the majority of people select to learn because it is easy to understand and access.
Firstly
, watching from the channel can
understand
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 easier than text because of the motion picture or sound.
For example
, we can use the sample of voice and image from broadcast series to improve
skill
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.
In contrast
, studying from
book
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 feel boring and quit
this
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 time. To illustrate, when they look
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 the book which have entire
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the
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word, it is hard for intending
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development
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skill
. On the one hand,
modern
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 method is
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 for thinking fantasy and learning new language
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due to
 the time. It is true that
learner
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learners
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 who obtain knowledge from
screen
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 can accomplish faster than
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 from papers.
According to digital
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 lesson,
it
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provides distinct
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 which focus only on usable data.
For instance
, broadcast
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 that intermission
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television
 present with detail and do not show the intro so much.
Furthermore
, someone who
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 weak in
reading
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skill
 must waste
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time more than other people.
Therefore
,
television
 is helpful for
this
 group because they can listen and look
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 picture
instead
. In conclusion,
it is clear that
due to
 the new technology and the specific feature that affects the thought processes,
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 have a more obvious advantage over the book and can improve language skills and imagination.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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