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The chart makes a comparison about differences between the number of children born in China and
USA
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the USA
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 from 1920 to 2000. Overall, it's clear evidence that the rates demonstrated similarities at the beginning of the given period and later, after 1960.
However
, there were considerable variations from 1930 to 1955, which it's possibly identified a high number in the proportion of birth in the Chinese population. Until 1930, both of the countries had almost the same levels of newborns approximately 10%.
Nevertheless
, in 1930, China showed a sharp increase of 5% overcoming the percentage of the USA, which
also
 rose their rate but like Chinese.
This
 one decreased dramatically 10% of the total newborns and remained steadily from 1940 to 1945 when they suffered another abrupt growth. Meanwhile, the births percentage went down significantly in 1940, reaching 5%. As well as the oriental country, the Americans levels rose, but only 10% in 1950, and, since that year, they decreased gradually until reaching about 7% in 2000.
Although
 China had a gentle decay after 1955 like the North Americans, their rates were lowest, around 5% less than the USA.
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