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Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest?

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There is no doubt that these days smoking is wide spreading over the world. The question is, what are the problems that smoking might
cause
? and how we could eliminate it?
This
 essay will examine the main
problem
 smoking can
cause
 and possible solutions to
this
problem
. In terms of
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problem
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, the major issue smoking can
cause
 is
a
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serious health damage. The main reason to support
this
 claim is that when a person starts smoking over
the
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time, the individual will get breathing difficulties, or multiple cancers and sometimes it might
cause
 death.
For instance
, many studies were conducted on smoking
people
 and all of them showed that every person
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smoke
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 had a 99% possibly chance to get cancer.
Thus
, smoking habits often
cause
 enormous
heath
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 issues and
finally
people
 death.
On the other hand
, some potential solutions to
this
problem
 are promoting awareness among
people
 and
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price
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 of cigarettes.
Through
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 informing the general population about the danger of
this
problem
,
people
 will be more conscious about their health and will not misuse it by introducing toxic factors to their
body
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.
Moreover
, the
next
 step in fighting cigarettes is by increasing
it
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 price, with
way
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 many
people
 will not be able to buy it and it will decrease the level of smoking word-widely. In conclusion,
people
 addicted to smoking had a high chance of getting serious health complications.
However
, we can significantly eliminate
this
problem
 by enlightening
people
 and raising cigarettes cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Cardiovascular disease
  • Chronic obstructive pulmonary disease (COPD)
  • Nicotine
  • Public health initiative
  • Secondhand smoke
  • Substance abuse
  • Tobacco cessation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Social norms
  • Healthcare burden
  • Preventive measures
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