You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager.In your letter: describe the health problem explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

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Dear sir, Since I started working with
this
company over the past six months, I have been having a really disturbing health challenge. I have been diagnosed with chronic low back pain for about four months now, and it doesn't seem like it is going to improve despite being on several analgesics. As to the specifics of my medical challenge, I always have severe aching lower back pain after sitting for about 30 minutes
while
I'm working on the computer. So, I went to see a GP for
this
and I did a Lumber Spine X-ray which confirmed that I have loss of Lumber lordosis with muscle spasm.
Therefore
, I was placed on pain-relieving medications to cure it. Actually, several reasons could be responsible for it but I believe the most important one is
due to
the poor state of the office chairs. I got information from a few of my other colleagues complaining about the same thing as well.
Although
mine is worse than theirs. As a solution, I think the chairs in all offices should be replaced with
a
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angulated at 90 degrees with an armrest. I
also
think the company should intermittently employ physiotherapists to train staff in good sitting positions and adequate back education. With
this
, we would work more comfortably and healthily. I look forward to your consideration. Yours faithfully, Moses.
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Consider adding a few more details to fully develop the issue, like how this problem has impacted your work efficiency.
coherence cohesion
While the structure is solid, ensuring that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next could slightly enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
Clear and logical structure makes the letter easy to follow.
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Polite and professional tone is maintained throughout the letter, making it appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph deals with a single main idea, contributing to clarity and coherence.
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