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Write about the following topic. Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays studying online is getting more and more popular, many universities from all over the world contribute to the development of
this
 idea by providing their
courses
 on the internet. In my opinion, I believe that it has only positive effects as it helps people to get an
education
 they couldn’t afford or never ever dreamt about. One significant advantage of internet
courses
 is that it doesn’t take any additional expenses like long-distance travel or accommodation in some countries with expensive housing. Which makes
education
 more affordable for some segments of the population.
Therefore
,
although
 studying by the university has many benefits like access to the library, face-to-face talk with teachers, it can be argued that due to modern technologies all of the facilities are available online now.
Moreover
. There is a tendency for completely free online
courses
, provided by the greatest universities in the world.
For example
, there are many Youtube Channels with a full set of lectures provided by Stanford, Oxford, Yale. While
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 there is no question about the value of the knowledge provided, it is clear that participants of the
courses
 cannot be considered as graduates of these universities. In conclusion, despite some drawbacks like a not full set of facilities and unavailability of receiving the real diploma, I believe that online
courses
 are a great step forward, as it allows to reduce the expenses on
education
,
moreover
 it helps to those who never even thought about higher
education
 to evaluate their knowledge about the world by watching Youtube.
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