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Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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In today's world, where poverty, hunger, and diseases have increased, the act of donating to
charity
 has become crucial. It seems to me that helping
charities
 by allocating part of your income to poor and in-need
people
 is necessary, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, helping
people
, especially the poor, and making them content, might bring happiness and wellness in others’ lives,
while
charities
 help numerous
people
.
For instance
,
charities
 gather poor
people
 and provide what they want and their basic needs. The second factor is the good feeling which will arise by helping others. Provided that
people
 donated a set amount of their salary to
charities
 every month, they would bring happiness to their own life
while
 making the poor’s life easier.
This
 leads us to the final that everybody should be concerned about all kinds of humans, it’s a social responsibility, and how better it can be to help consistently the
center
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 which can provide comfort and well-being for
people
 who need that or do some
charity
 works, the evidence would be, the more
people
 help, the needier
people
 will be saved. Some
people
 indeed think
charities
 are untrustworthy and believe they should help poor
people
 directly with no fixed amount. Despite
this
, it seems that there are many safe and reliable
charities
 that we can help through them, whether it is little or much.
To conclude
, these factors, monthly helping
charity
, spiritual
behavior
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 of helping, and donating bring happiness are the reasons for donating to
charity
 from a fixed amount of income.
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