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Some people prefer to have temporary jobs, which means they only work a few months in a year and use the rest of the time to do what they want. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, individuals like to have jobs that
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 for a couple of months in a year and spend the rest of the
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 doing whatever they want. In
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 situation, there are several benefits and
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 some drawbacks. On the one hand, I think
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 who choose to do a temporary career and use the other
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 to do what they want is beneficial.
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, they may need a higher awareness of
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 and money management.
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, the individuals would like to use less
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 to
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 so their earnings may not be quite as well as those who chose to
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 with less rest
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. In order to do whatever they want without a career, they may need better
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 and money management.
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, those who chose a short-period business may have more spare
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 to recover their body.
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, there are several drawbacks to be considered. The main disadvantage is the job and the salary may be unstable for
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 to make the decision to
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 for a short period of
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, they may not be suitable for
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 who already have a family. In my opinion, the money for temporary jobs may not be enough to raise a family especially for those with kids.
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, the taxable profit for a country like Taiwan may not be benefitted from the
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 who chose to have a temporary job since their yearly earnings may not reach the basic standard need to pay tax. In conclusion, I believe there are several pros for the
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 who make the choice to
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 a few months. At the same
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, we can not ignore the drawbacks at the same
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • pursue
  • self-development
  • life satisfaction
  • balance
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  • stress and anxiety
  • unemployment
  • long-term financial commitments
  • diverse experiences
  • employability
  • broader perspective
  • adaptable
  • innovative
  • career progression
  • benefits
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