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Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees?

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It is often claimed that some
people
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 spend more
hours
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 at
work
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 and they experience higher levels of
stress
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 because of their working conditions these days. I believe
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 has been caused due to the competitive nature of today’s businesses as well as the necessity of affording a living.
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, there are some measures that could be taken by employers to alleviate the effects of cited problems. Nowadays, many companies find themselves in continuous competition with their business rivals for providing services with higher quality and speed. To achieve
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 qualities, their
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 should meet required qualifications which are gained through undergoing high amounts of tension and working long
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 per
day
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. Those who
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 in a hydro-power plant,
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, should
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 12 hour-shifts with maximum precision to generate and transfer a certain amount of electricity into the nationwide network. The
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 major reason for working long stressful
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 of
work
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 is the high costs of living that have led
people
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 toward working multiple shifts in severe conditions each
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. Many workers could afford their lives only if they
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 at least two shifts per
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 circumstances have made working conditions more problematic than ever. To tackle the aforementioned issues, company owners could offer some solutions one of which would be conducting tutorials regarding
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 management techniques.
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 could be considered as an efficient way to teach
people
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 how to deal with
stress
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 at
work
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 and how to improve their performance. Examples of
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stress
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 management methods could be seen in simulated situations in which a mentor teaches the
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 practically how to use their learned knowledge to confront issues. These courses
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 can teach
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 methods to cope with long
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 of
work
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. Providing a priority-based to-do list is an example of
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 a method. Another step that could be taken by CEO’s could be bonuses that are considered as an incentive for hard-working
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. Despite being under a lot of pressure and working all
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 long, different packages of bonuses for
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staff
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 would act as a quick and powerful remedy. Buying tickets for a trip or booking a hotel reservation as an award to qualified employees could be known as great examples of compensation by their employer.
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 appreciation results in the company’s
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 being more consistent and energetic. In conclusion,
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, these days, the
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 of many companies experience a certain amount of tension and have to
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 long
hours
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 to cover requirements of their bosses and afford their daily costs, applying
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 management techniques through teaching
staff
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 and considering bonus packages would be seen as methods to resolve these issues by employers.
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