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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In my opinion, I think I agree that
parents
 should be the
one
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 teaching their
children
on
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how to be
a good members
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 of
society
. In
this
 essay, I will try to
further
 elaborate
both
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side
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 of these views, and give my reason as to why I agree
on
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 the
first
 view.
Parents
 are the
first
 members of
society
 that
children
 will encounter in their lives. So, I support
this
 view because of
this
 simple reason. If their
parents
 themselves cannot teach their
children
 how to behave in
society
, how do we expect
children
 to learn from others
.
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Children
 will inevitably learn from their
parents
 since they are the people they meet
everyday
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 and spend most of their time with during their childhood. With some
exception
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 of foster
children
, which they will learn most things from their
caretaker
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caretakers
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 that will become their parent figure in their lives. For the
second
 view, I think I can understand a little where they are coming from.
Children
 go to
school
everday
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everyday
every day
,
thus
 people will think that it is the
school
's responsibility.
Teachers
 can never give their full attention to each
children
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child
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. Because of
this
, I think
children
 cannot fully learn through their
teachers
 as much as they learn from their
parents
. We cannot
also
 guarantee that every
school
 will have the same standard for teaching. So the responsibility will eventually
ended
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 up with the
parents
 of each
children
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child
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. To conclude, I can say that even though
children
 go to
school
 every day and it will be the place
that
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 they will spend most of their time during the day. Schools ability to teach their
children
 are limited by the capability of their
teachers
 to care
each
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for each
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 child. Whilst
teachers
 are responsible for many
children
 at the
school
.
Thus
, they cannot
full
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 give their attention to each
children
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child
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 to teach them well enough.
Therefore
, it is better for
parents
 to teach their
children
on
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how to be
a good members
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a good member
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 of
society
. Since
,
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parents
 will be able to give more attention
for
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 their
children
 and will be able to spend more time with their
children
.
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