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Some universities are offering online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#universities #courses #alternative #classes #campus #development
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The online
education
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system
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a
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 alternative way for the
students
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whose
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 study in the university and
this
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system
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 has a logical improvement. We are in the
internet
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 era, so there is a good link between
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technnology
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technology
 and the learning
system
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. But, sometimes the technology has
revage
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revenge
 on the
education
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system
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. In
this
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 and minus sides
to
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 the online
education
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system
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.
The online
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 classes have some good
effect
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effects
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 on the university learning
system
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 as time and
money saving
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money-saving
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.
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, the
students
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 can spend less money than the
campus
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 lectures as they don't pay for
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transportation.
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,
Students
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 can stay at home and they don't waste their time on the way as
in
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 the bus or for wearing and
preapering
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preparing
 time for the school.
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, people
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 many chooses on the
internet
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 like a different lesson which the
students
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 don't find in the real university.
For instance
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, if you choose a
departmant
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department
 and the part of
campus
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 classes, you restrict with
campus
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 classes, but if you prefer the online course, you have limitless options. The
internet
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 age has some bad impact on our
life
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 and
this
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 is true for the online
education
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 as less
consantrate
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concentrate
concentrated
 and motivation.
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,
student's
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students'
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 concern is not much as
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campus
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 learning and
the
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virtual class,
also
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 when they
on
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are on
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 the
internet
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, they tend to make
different
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the different
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 activity as
a
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playing
game
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games
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 or
a
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searching social media.
For example
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,
a
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an
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 undergrad will look
alternative
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at alternative
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 part of
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opportunity
opputunity
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the opputunity
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 of the
internet
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, when they will be bored
on
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with
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 the online course. In conclusion,
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technology is a reality which increasing our life, for
this
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 reason, we can not
denied
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this
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 growing wave,
also
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 we have to keep up
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this
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with this
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 technology and introduce
into
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it into
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to
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our
education
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system
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.
However
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, we need to find a solution and build a bridge between new and old
education
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 systems for
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solving problems.
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