In some countries, an increaseing number of people are suffering from from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. it is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days many individuals are suffering from health problems because of their eating habits and that many
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argue that the administration should impose a higher tax on fast
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. I partially disagree with the viewpoint and in the forthcoming
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I shall discuss reasons.
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with, eating habit is a choice every individual should have a right to eat according to their preference. The choice of
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changes from place to place, some
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like to eat cultural
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while others choose junk
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, the population who lived in the countryside likes to eat lots of vegetables in their meal, But
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who live in the cosmopolitan cities prefer fast
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, individuals who are living in the big cities have less time to cook because of their busy work schedule so they are not able to cook their meals. They do not have much choice other than to eat outside.
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, in cities like Newyork where
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worked about 8 hours a day after
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they can not cook their meal so they totally depend on packed
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, Fat
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is not good for individuals health because it contains preservatives to keep
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fresh which is not suitable for human health and it costs a lot for an individual. To conclude, higher tax rates can not be a solution for fatty
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because lots of
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depend on it.
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, the government should encourage their population to eat healthy
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so they can live a healthy lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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