Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? It is a positive or negative development?

In the
last
decades, as a consequence of the development in social
network
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and
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the entretainment
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entretainment
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entertainment
world, many famous
people
are richer than politicians, the main reasons for these are the changes in
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advertisement
advertising
and the
government
jobs
seing
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seeing
as community
jobs
, being a negative development as
people
prefers
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other kind
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of education and
jobs
. There are some reasons for
this
change,
firstly
with the attention given to the social network and their constant increased numbers, advertisement
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increasing as well in
plataforms
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platforms
like
instagram
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or
facebook
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, and the companies or industries are paying to celebrities for
those advertisement
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that previously were doing by tv channels or physical publicity.
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, is known that Kim Kardashian
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around six figures
for
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sponsor
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in some social network a new drink or pharmaceutical product.
Moreover
, in many countries the
government
jobs
as seen as
a community
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a community job
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jobs
with great value to the society,
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they get less money in retribution.
In other words
, a
certin
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certain
amount of
adminsitrations
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administrations
administration
considered the politicians similar to firefighters, rescuers and even healthcare workers, and
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their payment is less than other professions.
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illustrate
this
, in countries like Sweden or Finland,
people
who
works
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in the
government
area earn the lowest salaries all over the country. Considering the previous explanation,
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strongly believe it is not fair to have
this
gap in salaries between politicians and famous
people
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since usually, the former are
well educated
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people
who
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the future of each nation and having a
gigant
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giant
gigantic
difference in salaries, could provoke in the following generations
an
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increase in
entretainment
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entertainment
jobs
instead
of
decide
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to serve your country.
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, nowadays the percentage of
people
that are
chosing
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choosing
to go to
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university or college is lesser than
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before
, as they wish to become celebrities
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social networks. In conclusion,
people
who
works
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for the
government
gained
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less than celebrities because of social change,
development
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a
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of
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negative
tranformation
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transformation
and
promoting
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informal
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education. I firmly believe that should be regulated by every country in order to have more balance in society.
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  • revenue streams
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  • income sources
  • free-market principles
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