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Mobile phones are considered essential by most people nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of mobile phones

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There is no doubt that the importance of cell
phones
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 is increasing day by day as well as it become a necessary part of our
life
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 without mobile
people
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 cannot imagine their
life
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 in today's world, the drawbacks cannot be ignored. There are countless benefits of mobile
phones
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 in a fast-paced
life
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. The
first
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 and foremost reason is that nowadays
people
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 can finish their lots of work with the help of cell
phones
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 ,as they have a hectic schedule and more pressure of their work responsibilities in their workplace and home.
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 , thanks to the latest technology everything's
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 as bank accounts, bills ,online shopping and the others things which are attached with mobile , due to
people
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 can pay bills , money transfers and shop with mobile
phones
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.
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,
people
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 can use their
phones
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 for multiple purposes
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 as entertainment, research and map. To explain it, there are lots of videos like comedy, movies , songs available on the internet folks can enjoy them in their leisure time as well as they can use it for navigation with the help of the map and easily reach their destination.
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, it is
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 helpful for students, the internet provides more information about their study topics and makes it easy.
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 , it's become a major source of worldwide news.
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, it has some disadvantages while using mobile
phones
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. More use of mobile
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 creates major impacts on children's.
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, children spend more hours on phone
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 as playing games and watching videos,
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 it is harmful to children's eyes. Owing to
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, they do not like to play outdoor games and face health issues like overweight and laziness . In conclusion, while
people
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 cannot think of their sans cell
phones
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, it can be considered some negative effects on
people
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's
life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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